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Once before we where so close
The love could never die
We lay in to each others arms
And watch the world go by

The way you looked into my eyes
Will never leave my mind
To feel that love, and see no lies
I leave my fears behind

It felt so safe, it felt so right
That it could never change
To hold u close and oh so tight
Our love could still remain.

To know we are no longer as one
The thought tears me apart
As my heart thumps on its own
I don’t know where to start

I’ve tried to move on with my life
And treat you as a friend
But every time I see your face
Your love I cant defend

I know this looks like one last try
Of a fallen desperate man
But if you could spare me one last shot
I’ll give it all I can

In the time we have been apart
I realise what I need
To feel your love, inside my heart
To seal all wounds that bleed

I love you dearly, I always will
I know you love me too
And when I see you smiling face
I have reason to pull through

A final message to you my love
I hope I say this clear
You mean to me the world above
For you I shed a tear.

With all of my love

Steven
  -x-x-
©2006-2009 ~steve73479
:iconsteve73479:

Author's Comments

this is a poem i wrote for my ex girlfriend to show her how i felt. it means a lot to me and i would like some opinions on it please i am not very good at poems but honest answers would be very helpful:)

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:iconscrwdawrld77:
I love it. It doesn't seem like you're bad with poems.

Very emotional piece. love it again. =3

Fav!
:iconsteve73479:
thank you very much it is the first poem i have written thanks for your encouragement:)
:iconwild-horse:
wow steve, i didnt know you were such the poet!
thats fantastic!!!!
im telling ya if liam wrote something like that for me id probably ask him to be mine again....
but its not gonna happen so, meh.
keep up the good work!
ooooh idea *ding! lightbulb*
you write a poem, send it to me in a note, ill do a pic for it, send you the pic, then, you submit the poem with the pic as the preview thingy.....
would be cool to do another collab. again
:hug: :D

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:iconvivalafreak:
This is beautiful. I love it. <3

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I don't break hearts; I just dent them. <3
:iconsteve73479:
wow thank you, you dont know how much that really meens to me

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~*~Arkanid~*~
:iconvivalafreak:
No problem. =]

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I don't break hearts; I just dent them. <3
:iconsanity-not-a-option:
you could be a professional but probably like me you like to keep things personal :clap: it is a truly beautiful piece of work

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i'll take the bite of the bullet for you anyday my friends.:heart::heart: caring well tempered except if you mess with my buddies then you better run ...reeeal fast
loathing life loving the ride
Forever a wolf human my poison
:iconsteve73479:
wow thank you so much im very proud of this piece as it is my first poem thank you for the encouragment.

steve
-x-x-

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~*~Arkanid~*~
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its one of the most powerful poems i have ever seen..so i had to comment *smiles her wolfie ears moving back and forth her dragon sense making her grunt her cat personality making her hiss at her wolf side* is a lil bit of a phycho but jennifer can calm me down sometimes *wags tail*

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i'll take the bite of the bullet for you anyday my friends.:heart::heart: caring well tempered except if you mess with my buddies then you better run ...reeeal fast
loathing life loving the ride
Forever a wolf human my poison

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